Aspies For Freedom

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UNTITLED

check those  doors
ya, still locked
sit back down and stare at my hands
hand grips the pen
pen grips the page
words grip my mind
emotions attempt to be defined
the noise just hides the silence where we leave our souls to cry and i just stare
and stare
and see nothing in this everything
and everything i can see?
they tell me its nothing
but i'd rather to not believe them than to cry in the silence and live in the  
   noise
AND WATCH TIME TURN THE THINGS WE ONCE KNEW IN TO A COMPRESSION OF ALL WE COULD NEVER BE
but they call that life
and try not to imagine that there could be anything more
so i just keep loking around
trying to understand this void they accept
and label
as reality.




IT NEVER OCCURED  TO ME

drowning in this
barley breathing
i execute one movement
and stuggle through the next
the mystery of it
is in its simplicity
you say "what is this?"
and i show you everything i am.

those are really greatpieces of work, and catchy phrases. Keep up the good work.

:grin:   I like them, especially the repetition of "grip" in the first one.
One thing I would suggest, spellchecking.  I know some people find it really anoying to read poems where there's miscapitalizations, misspellings, ect.
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very nice kai  :grin:

Wow, that's almost like good rap. Strange rhythm but rhythm is still solid, word choice is good and very poetic outside the lines. Definitely not what I expected. Yes, though, do spell check.

thanks everyone. spell check is just so critical though. its always telling me i spell wrong! lol...