Aspies For Freedom

Incase you didn't know, I'm currently trying to involved in the custom built watercooling resiviour buisness... here's my current ad. Tell me what you think...

Your advert doesn't tell me what it is that you do. I'd want to see some of your previous works and a price list and also who you are (a name to contact for more information be it via telephone or email, a buisness address so I know your legetimate).

And you spelt 'reservoir' wrong.

The current picture makes it look like you are advertising a rave or hippy music festival of some kind. It's very pretty but I don't have the technical know-how to understand how difficult it was to make so I don't understand it's significance. It may have taken yonks to make but if an advert doesn't catch my attention within 0.5 of a second my eyes will look elsewhere.

If I don't see an advert that looks proffesional I will move onto the next.


Please don't take this as a kick in the balls, it isn't. You asked my opinon and you got it  

Hey, thanks for being truly honest with me. That's a rare thing these days.




And I'll take your advice into hand. Besides, it only took me ~10 to make that picture...

Yeh, Brightman's right; the graphic's great, but what are you trying to sell here; fine arts?

What is the title thing; a company name? People looking for reservoir fitters are going to think it's weird!

For a business ad, keep it clean, keep it to the point, keep it easy to read; a single orange stripe (say) on a white background will "grab" people a lot more effectively than busy graphics. As for titles, "Badger plumbing Co." would be OK, but "Fast-Fit Domestic Reservoirs" would be better; it tells both what you are offering and tells them what they want to hear (everyone likes "fast", or "clean" or "professional"). Avoid words that don't create a positive impression; even neutral words that don't appear immediately relevant will create negativity.

Don't include anything that doesn't tell people what you want them to know; once you've got the details down as Brightman suggest, then it's OK to include a slogan, like "We fit the reservoirs you need!" say, but hitting them with puzzles or noise will just have them moving on to the next ad. Anyone who's looking for things to be done is not looking for an intellectual challenge, so forget the "X-Factor Mastication Tomography" and the like as, if people have to reach for a dictionary to understand the ad, then you've already blown it!

You, on the other hand, need to reach for one to check your spelling; it's important!

Good luck.

The picture itself is stunning, keep us up to date with how the business works out.

I agree with the others here. The graphic is great but the advert tells me nothing.

the background is too busy, and it drives alot of the consumers eye away from the text. It's probably not relevant or nessicary either.

The text could probably be simplified too, and I don't have any idea what the ad is for.

Bright neon colours hurt my head, so I really had to make myself look at what you said. It didn't make much sense to me (you don't really say what kind of service you are offering). Also, when something is spelled wrong in an ad, the advertiser has already blown it for me, because the ad doesn't look professional when spelled incorrectly. I am sure there are many people who feel that way (even if they aren't as perfectionist as I am).

I agree with the others, make your ad simple but positiv, and state what your service is clearly. And make absolutely sure it is spelled right! With spellcheck on every computer these days that shouldn't be too hard.

But asking others for their opinion before putting your ad in a newspaper or other public place is a good idea (which you have done).

All the best for your venture!

Uschi

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Okay, Gwynfryn, you got me there  :oops: . Positive!!!!!!!!! But we don't have spellcheck here! And it was a typo, anyway. I personally don't really need spellcheck, unless I am not well (and I have been battling a very bad migraine since Monday, living on painkillers right now).

Uschi

Where's the ad?

:!: Mich :?: